I am writing to apply for the part-time position at your sports centre.貴センターのアルバイトに応募いたします
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I am writing to apply the part-time position at your sports centre.forが抜けている
apply toのうしろには組織や機関の名前が来て、apply forのうしろには仕事、講座、ビザのように応募や申請の対象そのものが来ます。apply to the universityとapply for a scholarshipを並べて覚えると、対象が違うことがはっきりします。I applied to three companies and for five different positions.のように、1文の中で両方を使い分けることもあります。
experience は仕事の話なら数えない
「経験」という意味のexperienceは不可算名詞なので、複数形にしません。experiencesと複数形にすると「個々の出来事、体験」という意味に変わり、職務経験の話からずれます。応募の手紙では、two years of experienceのように期間で示すのが確実です。
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I have two years of experience in customer service.接客の仕事を2年経験しています
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I have many experiences in customer service.職務経験の意味では複数形にしない
work experienceも同じ扱いで、複数形にはなりません。I have work experience in a hotel.やI have plenty of work experience.のように使い、work experiencesとはしません。量を示したいときはa lot of experienceかplenty of experienceとします。
be responsible for のうしろは名詞か動名詞
be responsible forは職務内容を示すときの定型です。forは前置詞なので、うしろには名詞か動名詞が来ます。to不定詞は続きません。
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I was responsible for taking bookings and handling payments.予約の受付と会計を担当していました
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I was responsible to take bookings and handle payments.forのうしろにto不定詞は使えない
I could start immediately, as my current contract ended last month.
I would be able to work any evening from Monday to Friday, as well as Saturday mornings.
I am free during the summer holiday, from mid-July until the end of September.
availableは自分を主語にして使う
be availableは「都合がつく、空いている」という意味で、応募の手紙の定番です。応募の手紙では自分を主語にして、I am available from July.、I am available on weekday evenings.のように、いつなら都合がつくのかを添えて使います。I can work from Monday.でも通じますが、availableのほうがFormalな手紙になじみます。
I amをI'm、do notをdon'tのように縮めた形は、Formalな手紙では使いません。応募の手紙は最初からFormalに固定されているので、書き終えたあとに短縮形が残っていないか見直しておきましょう。なお、これは短縮形の話であって、I am sorryをSorryのように文の要素を省く書き方とは別のものです。
08モデルアンサー
ここまでの型を使って、1通書いてみます。課題は最初に示した出題例です。
IELTS Writing Task 1
You have seen an advertisement for a part-time job at a sports centre in your town. Write a letter to the manager. In your letter
explain why you are interested in the job
describe the experience you have
say when you would be able to start
Write at least 150 words. Begin your letter as follows: Dear Sir/Madam,
Dear Sir/Madam,
I am writing to apply for the part-time position of reception assistant at Riverside Sports Centre, which was advertised in the Weekly Gazette on 5 June.
The job appeals to me because it combines customer service with sport. I have been a member of the centre for four years, so I already know how busy the reception area gets at the weekend. I am also keen to work in an environment where I can use my language skills.
I have two years of experience in a similar role. At Green Cafe I was responsible for taking bookings, handling payments and dealing with complaints, serving around a hundred customers a day. I also helped to train two new members of staff last year. In addition, I am comfortable using booking software and I speak both Japanese and English.
I am available from 1 July and could work any evening from Monday to Friday, as well as Saturday mornings. I have enclosed my CV and would be happy to attend an interview at any time.
I am not very experienced, but ...のように、自分の弱みから書き始める形は応募の手紙に向きません。経験が足りない設定でも、Although I have not worked in a sports centre before, ...のように、まず事実を認めてから持っている材料へつなぐ書き方にすると、内容が前向きに読めます。